Pile of thoughts nailed me in a wily looP
Egged me towards my forgotten desirE
Naïve heart chased a blind redemptioN
Settled for small wishes and silly glorieS
Instead of challenging the waves of alibI
Voices of emotions urged me to be a leV
Ending the era of losses towards ablazE
*Lev : Yiddish name meaning lion.*Alibi : regrets
This poem is written on prompt # "pensive" for participating in the onesingleimpression blog carnival. Please visit to read other writer's works. Thanks :) Images courtesy : fc00.deviantart & an-cat-dubh
10 comments:
wow - this is fantastic
my favorite line is…settled for small wishes and silly glories Instead of challenging the waves of alibi
you have taken acrostic to a new level having it front and back...nicely played!
Wow, this really takes a lot of skill! I love it; fantastic job!
What a creative poem...I love the double acrostic.
I am loving this! Truly amazing words and structure =D
Poem is no doubt excellent.. but it appears to have come out of focused and dedicated effort of a sculptor of words.. it just can't happen otherwise.. I salute you for this extraordinary creation..
and humbly invite you also to visit.. A Little More Than Ordinary , my page to bless my 100th post and also to laugh a bit
Thanks to all of you.Claudia, Brian,Saumya,The write girl,rikaalinfinityy and Ramesh.
I really wondered if people will like this. I am relieved.
Well Mr.Ramesh, you are right. It's more of crafting.Getting the right words for ending each line with the kind of meaning i wished was a tough task.To be fair had to search intensely and had to change the lines to suit the words i got to make the poem as it looks now. But somehow i love this format. Once again, thanks alot to all of you for reading. :)
Well crafted! Enjoyable read...
This is really very done!
a trophy
tumblewords and gautami, thanks for the comments. :)
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